I really like the idea of the suburban football to a sun spinning in space.Perhaps another word rather than "apogee"(?)-such an arcane word-( I had to look it up).
Apogee is the correct word for the moment I witnessed. It's the tiny bit of science nerd In me.
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Actually, it was a yellow ball kicked under a roof at night: no Sun involved. You see what the reader can bring to the piece?
yeees...My previous comments about other work, related to your narrative arc over years, with many recurring themes!
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